Wednesday, February 8, 2012

I'm Hearing Voices Character Blogfest - Day Deuce



From Cassie Mae's Blog:

February 8th - Wednesday - Diaplogue Introduction: Have two characters introduce each other using only dialogue - no backstory, no internalization, just dialogie between the two. Max 250 words.

Today is the second day of the I'm Hearing Voices Character Blogfest. You already met Rena, from my current WIP, yesterday. Charming wasn't she. Today you're going to hear a conversation that they had recently. I pinned a recording device to my protagonist, Reese's, sweatshirt. This is was was said.



“Come on Rena! You have to get to the party.”

“Why, Reese? Why do we even want to go to see the Counsil?”

“Beats the shit out of me. All I know is when I spoke to them yesterday; they said they wanted to speak to us both.”

“Great. So I wonder what secrets Levona and dad are gonna spring on us now.”

“I don’t have the foggiest idea Ms. Doom-n-gloom. And moms name is Leona. Levona is our Aunt. Plus I ain’t calling that man my dad. It’s Stephen until otherwise.”

“Shut up!”

“Don’t be dumb and put that down. If someone sees you with that-”

“Listen here you dumb bitch! We just found out each other exists and you expect me to remember every Tom, Dick, and Harry you grew up with, while I was ripped away from everything I knew, because you’re some Savior or some crap like that?”

“It’s Kirima, Monica, and Luka. Dipshit.”

“Whatev. Wait, what?”

“You said every Tom, Dick, and Harry. It’s Kirima, Monica, and Luka.”

“What about Tarrick?”

“I didn’t grow with him. We just met. In fact we only met a couple of days before you showed up to ruin everything. And don’t even think about going for your Switch again.”

“I can’t anyways. Remember? Leona cast the binding charm on me.”

“Right. Forgot. Sorry.”

“So is this the place?”

“Yup. Are you ready?”

“Not really but what choice do we have?”

“None.”

“That’s awesome.”

“Your sarcasm embodies you.”

“Welcome Realmwalkers.”

45 comments:

  1. The tension between them is great. Good job with the characters.

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  2. It amazes me how much we can learn about the plot and the character's personality just through dialogue. I liked it.

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  3. Love the dialogue and how it brings us into the story. Good job.

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    1. Thanks Dianne. I wasn't sure how much I wanted to give away.

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  4. Nicely done. And smart to pin the listening device to her. I used the same method in a scene only it was a sleazy attorney who sold his client out. Gotta love those listening devices.

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    1. They sure do come in handy. I think all Attorney's should have a recorded attached to them.

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  5. I'm a huge fane of sarcasm. ;-) Love this.

    ~JD

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    1. Me too! My wip drips with it. Hopefully not too much though. Thanks for stopping by!

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  6. I totally laughed at the "Kirima, Monica, and Luka" line. Great job!

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    1. Yes, those sisters love to pick out each others hiccups!

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  7. Hi Danielle - it's great how in that short piece you are actually setting us up for a whole host of characters. Smart move - well done xxx

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    1. Wow, thanks! I appreciate the feedback. I couldn't leave them out.

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  8. Good interaction between the sisters.

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  9. I just noticed the fingers attacking each other on the sidebar. Too funny.

    Nice dialogue. All sorts of questions and tension. Love it!

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    1. Those fingers are my wallpaper on my iPhone. They are so sute! - In a zombiefied way.

      Thanks!

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  10. Bickering is always fun! Thanks for sharing!

    JWP

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  11. dang! such language!
    strong words to build up their strength for what they must face.
    nice slice!

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    1. I know! What potty mouths. Can't control those two. ;)
      Thanks!

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  12. The banter shows how comfortable they are together while giving me a good sense of who they are. Nice!

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    1. Thanks! It's their lack of love for one another that makes it so easy for them to be "in-your-face".

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  13. I am so curious about what she was picking up, and the council, and why one of them was ripped from everything she knew. I'm very curious.

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    1. I would love to tell you but then it wouldn't be much fun to read when it's perfected.

      Thanks!

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  14. Sounds intriguing. I'd love to know some more of the back story between Reese and Rena.

    They have a great sibling rivalry. The tension was really palable in this exchange.

    Excellent stuff. :)

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    1. Thanks Clare! There is a history behind it all. Glad you liked it!

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  15. The conversation was very punchy, which sets the scene well.

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    1. Their relationship works well this way, I think. Thanks for checking it out!

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  16. Makes me curious to know more about the relationship between these two!

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    1. Making you curious, makes me happy to know I did this scene the way I intended it.

      Thanks!

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  17. Sarcasm is one of my fave things!
    The sisters being Realmwalkers sounds interesting!

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    1. I live for sarcasm. Being a Realmwalker is in their blood, but not their nature.

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  18. Sarcasm R US are those two! Reese and Rina are quite the pair. I see by your sidebar you are a zombie enthusiast. So is my young hero, Victor Standish. Ah, not quite. Though he is in love with a Victorian ghoul. Alice Wentworth sheds a whole new light on the phrase "eating my heart out!"

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    1. Love that "Sarcasm R Us" line! Love zombies. Not that I want to snuggle up to one in bed, but that do haunt my dreams.

      I'm coming to meet Alice and Victor.

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  19. Such bickering! But that's what makes it fun to read ^_^

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  20. These girls crack me up with their attitudes. Reminds me of me and my BFF. Yep - for real. Their story is so much more interesting tho.

    And BTW - I think the cover of the book you just finished reading is going to give me nightmares. *cringe*

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    1. Me and my bestie are like this too! We are more sisters than friends, I think that's why it works for us. I'm sure the same thing is tyur about you and your BFF.

      It's a great book! Hope you sleep well. Muahahaha!

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  21. Realmwalkers? So intrigued. Great give and take in the conversation. New follower :)

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    1. Maybe when I think it's perfect... You can read it. I haven't let anyone read this wip yet.

      Thanks for following! Followed back!

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  22. Loving you characters. Can't wait to read more.

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  23. Great voices between the two. I should have thought of using colors to make my characters distinct . .

    .......dhole

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    1. Your's was easy to read with or without the colors.

      Thanks!

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