Tuesday, August 14, 2012

What If Blogfest - Twisting It Up

WHAT IF?
Fairytale Madness BlogFest!
AUGUST 13th – 17th

Have you noticed that by changing one detail; one event, one character trait, one thought...you can completely alter the rest of the story?

For this bloghop we are exploring "What If?"
Not only do we want it to be fun, but it will hopefully be a fun writing exercise and make for some great reading during the hop!
To enter: Think of your favorite "well known" fairytale and ask "What If…!"
Then, pick one of these four categories:
· Best Plot Twist - Cassie
· Best Love Story - Morgan
· Best Tragedy - Leigh
· Best Comic Relief - Mark
 

Can you guess what team I picked? Go Team Cassie Mae!
Although mine could be either Plot Twist or Tragedy - I had to decide that it wouldn't be a tragedy without the plot twist first.

*whispering* Hey... pfft... I know I went over my 300 words. I couldn't help myself.
Here we go!!!
Stiltskin and the Baby

The night was chilled with the impeding storm. She sat by the fire, swaying and chanting. His arrival was known even before he forced open the door.
“You wretched girl! What have you done to me?” His belly gorged with life.
“Did you not say, Mr. Stiltskin, that you wanted my first born?” A wicked smile burned across the face of the girl who spun straw into gold.
She sauntered over to the old tramp who now supporting his arms on his hips. “This is not what I meant!” He bellowed.
“I recently had summoned a man-caller,” the burn of her smile grew, “and oh what a man,” she paused at his ear, “you get my meaning.”
Her breath sent shivers down his spine. “You have to help me get it out you witch! After all – I did do you a favor once.”
“A favor? Ha! You blackmailed me but you silly little troll. Next time make sure you know which devil you’re making a deal with.”
Dear Mr. Rumpelstiltskin felt the pang of her baby kick his womb. “Oh!” he moaned. And with that he ran into the Dark Forest.
She laughed her way to the door knowing he wouldn’t make it very far. “Grimm!” She called.
Her large mastiff marched to her side and nuzzled his nose in her hip. “Grimm, follow.” She commanded.
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Stiltskin ran as hard as he could, knowing he wouldn’t make it very far. The girl he once knew was nothing more than a girl. Right?
Stupid him. He knew one day his trickery on others would be his undoing. He never thought it would be like this though. He needed help. There was no way this baby could be delivered – naturally. Bile rose in his throat from the thought.
Another kick from the creature inside sent him to his knees. Oh the agony and pain.
He knew what he had to do.
His knife felt familiar yet alien in his hands. I have to do this. I can do this.
“No need,” the girl’s voice purred from the shadows.
His back stiffened with fear.
“Grimm, lay him down please.” The dog pulled Stiltskin by his collar so his bare belly faced the sky.
“No please!” Mr. Skin begged. Grimm slammed his paw down on the old man’s face, shutting him up for the last time.
He squirmed as only the meager troll could but the girl was determined to get which that she desired. He felt the tug of the knife and then the wail of a baby.
“There, there,” the girl crooned. “Why Mr. Stiltskin you’re the surrogate of a beautiful baby girl.”
The world was slipping from him now, “baby girl” was all he heard right before –
“Grimm, eat.”
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Finally the girl had her child as expected, although she wanted a boy. Her daughter will grow up strong and wise and no man will take her from her mother like her father did.
“I think I’ll call you Maleficent.”

51 comments:

  1. Ha, excellent twist - well done!

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    1. Thanks! Hope you are enjoying your blog tour!

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  2. Ohh, that is terrific. Love the end line.

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    1. Thanks Suzi! It's one of my fav lines too.

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  3. Caught me from the first line. Well done!

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  4. Oh, awesome plot twist, loved it! Sounds like the beginning of a dark and twisted fairy tale!

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    1. I know what you mean. After I wrote this, my mind began to wonder.

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  5. I feel sorry for Rumple. What an awful end. Great twist. My Entry

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    1. That's what I was going for. Everyone hates Rump and I wanted them to feel for him.

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  6. Holy cow, that was freaky! Awesome! Seriously awesome.

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  7. Eeeee! Frighteningly tragic. Think you've created a third category-- horror. lol. Love the bit with the knife feeling alien (chills.) Awesome work. :)

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    1. I was wishing they had a horror catagory. hehe

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  8. That was wonderful, in a horrible and OMG kind of way. Lovely twist.

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    1. Lmbo! I love that "horrible and OMG"

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  9. TWIST-ED!!!
    I love it! And the end is killing me... "Grimm, eat!" Bleh!
    This rocks!
    Thanks so much for being part of the fest!

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    1. Thanks Leigh!
      This is one of my fav blogfest yet!
      You guys rock!

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  10. This. Gave. Me. Shivers.
    Great job!!! Loved it!

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    1. Aww thanks Jax!
      So....where's you entry ;)

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    2. No entry from me this time around. It has been a crazy week. :/
      But this fest looked like a blast!

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  11. Oh wow! Right now I'd give anything to have someone be pregnant for me, lol. Though, I probably wouldn't have them eaten by my dog afterward, haha!

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    1. ;) I think after a while every woman would like to have someone else carry them. Hope your prego gets better and not so miserable.

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  12. haha! A twisty tragedy that made me laugh (probably 'cause I was pregnant 6 months ago ;) I laughed especially at the baby's name. But the rest was very creepy tragic - great job!

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    1. Eeep! Thanks! Congrats on the "new" baby!

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  13. Dark and chilling! Awesome! Love her revenge!

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  14. Ooo... A twist indeed! Very fun, Danielle!

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    1. Thanks Morgan! This is an AWESOME fest!

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  15. Oh, weird and slightly creepy. Well done! What does the dog require in payment?

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  16. Oooh... this is fun. But I really like it because it'd star an evil villainess and not your typical princess.

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    1. Shucks, thanks! Hope everything in life is going good for you!
      I like it when evil can win sometimes but only in fiction.

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  17. Wow!

    That was Horror, never mind the plot twists!!!

    EXCELLENT job and now I'm staying away from anyone with a beer and a blue pill :)

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  18. AHHH! That was awesome. Very creative. Great job.

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  19. Loved it! Freaky and dark. Best twist ever.

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    1. Wow! Thanks. I hope the judges agree too!

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  20. Oh. My. Goodness. What a FANTASTIC twist! It was so dark and so creepy!!! *Shivers* I don't think I'll ever look at the fairytale the same ever again :D

    Samantha
    Writing Through College

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    1. Well I hope I didn't ruin it for you. Thanks!

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  21. D.A.R.K. *shivers
    Delivers a solid punch, right to the solar plexus!

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    1. I love that you used solar plexus! Don't hear that much. Cudos to you!
      And thanks!

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  22. That was a seriously unusual twist! Grimm, indeed. ;) Awesome stuff.

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  23. Ooh now that's a twist and a half! Talk about girl power revenge. LOL!

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  24. Wow. That was amazing and if I were part of the voting team, you'd win! Great to find you on the What If? Blog fest. Great piece!
    A2Z Mommy and What’s In Between

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