We all know how important the first and last lines are in every chapter. This blogfest will hopefully get your HOOKERS and HANGERS polished making it impossible for readers to put down your book and leaving them begging for more!
On July 16th, post the first sentence from each chapter.
On July 18th, post the last sentence from each chapter.
Post as many as you like!
They will be judging everyone's first 3 Hookers and Hangers.
I know I it's only the first 3 but I added another. I wanted to do every Hooker but gave up on that. I decided to make this as painless as possible.
Occupiers
CH. 1 - The night was icy, bitter with war and hate.
CH. 3 - Looking into my visor mirror I quickly rubbed the blood onto the cuts and bruises Mitch so kindly left on my face.
CH. 4 - Once they opened, my eyes focused on a large figure hovering over me.
CH. 5 - I really wasn't in the mood the morning for Mitch's funeral service.
These are excellent snippets. I tried to pick a favourite, but couldn't, as all four got me intrigued.
ReplyDeleteThey're all great, but the first two are my favorites.
ReplyDeleteThat first one is a FANTASTIC opening line for a book! So precise and powerful. You have me at that line :)
ReplyDeleteGreat hooks. I really like CH3 - 'cuts and bruises Mitch so kindly left on my face.' I am intrigued to see why Mitch hurt him/her and the dynamic seems interesting because of the choice of words "kindly". Nice job.
ReplyDeleteGreat job. That first one really set the tone.
ReplyDeleteI like the first one a lot.
ReplyDeleteWow. Very interesting. They definitely do their job of making me want to read more!
ReplyDeleteOoh. All so ominous. I love these.
ReplyDeletefirst line is great!
ReplyDeleteYour first line is so, so, so good!
ReplyDeleteExcellent way to start your story! Great hookers! And I love the darkness in your writing :)
ReplyDeleteWhat an excellent first hook! They are all great, but the first one is especially strong!
ReplyDeleteWhoa! I felt like I was reading the story! Great job, Danielle!
ReplyDeleteGreat lines- I can tell there will be a lot going on in this book. well done.
ReplyDeleteI love that opening line - its so evocative :)
ReplyDeleteOOH! As for #2... he needs some cuts and bruises himself! :( Sad!
ReplyDeleteGreat hooks though! Love 'em!
the first line is awesome! sets the tone for the whole book! great job!
ReplyDeleteMy favorite is the first one. It's very evocative and sets the mood for the story.
ReplyDelete#1 definitely! The last one made me smile though. :)
ReplyDeleteI agree with everyone else that first line really hooks me!! But I also think the one where they rub the blood into the scratches made me really want to know what is up with this person.
ReplyDeleteYou totally have me hooked!! I can't wait to read your hangers!
Love chapter 3 here! I mean you expect someone to rub blood off a cut, not onto it. My kind of story:)
ReplyDeleteThe second one really got me. So many mysteries in one sentence!
ReplyDeleteThanks guys! You are all so great yourselves!
ReplyDeleteWow! Yea, I'm in. I would definitely keep reading!
ReplyDeleteThat sounds like one hell of a story. I need to know more right now!!
ReplyDeleteChapter 3 is the one that makes me the most curious to read on... why would she be rubbing blood ON to cuts/bruises....?
ReplyDeleteOooh, really good. These all creeped me out in a good way. :) The last one was particularly clever. I'm glad you included it, since it gives some context to the second one. (Or, at least, makes me even more curious.)
ReplyDeleteWow, this one sounds pretty dark & dramatic, too. I think the first one is the best, but they're all very hooky!
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